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Please make marine protected areas a top priority for the Monterey Bay National
Marine Sanctuary, and move forward on this critical issue now.SIGNITURE
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Todd's Comments on the Draft
In general, a clearer explanation of the issue is needed. Parts of it are vague and/or reference information that the recipients of the letter are unlikely to have in their heads. I find that this makes the letter difficult to comprehend. I was not even aware that the status of MPAs in the Monterey Bay National Marine Sanctuary was an issue. Is there some legislation up about this? I agree (as proposed in the question box below) that we need to take a specific position on this issue. In summary, I believe that the letter should be edited so that it can serve as a brief introduction to the issue and an explanation of why it is important. We already know that this issue receives relatively little attention, so it cannot be assumed that politicians have preexisting knowledge of it.
To Do List
Item | Done? |
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Add interesting facts (with their sources) that could catch the eye of a politician. | No |
Decide on what action we want to encourage politicians to take. | No |
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